I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Hollie I like your story I like how you did it about chocolate burst milkshakes. I also like how you like described it. You don´t have to work on anything that is how good your writing is. Hope to hear back. Aone see you later...
Hi Hollie I like instructions how to make a chocolate milk shake punctuation like full stops and commas. In verse 5 this part does not make sense And luckey but not least. And make sure that words are spelt right.
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Hi Hollie I like your story I like how you did it about chocolate burst milkshakes. I also like how you like described it. You don´t have to work on anything that is how good your writing is. Hope to hear back.
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Hi Hollie
ReplyDeleteI like instructions how to make a chocolate milk shake punctuation like full stops and commas. In verse 5 this part does not make sense And luckey but not least. And make sure that words are spelt right.
I like your work - From Emma